Another amazing Query article. :) As I've been studying pitch creation (you know me, all Pitch U, all the time!), I've been paying special attention to the weight (number of pages in actual MS devoted to certain elements) implied by what you highlight in the query or pitch.

From the Back Cover blurb, it is clear that the majority of the book's pages will focus on things "getting personal" and "where it takes her. " The sister is the motivation for what happens, but what happens in the book is "what happens at the club."

This is a world of difference from, say, a blurb that starts with, "When Brynn's younger sister goes missing and is suspected to be in hiding from cops and criminals alike, Brynn races to find and protect her before she ends up dead, just like their mother."

Same facts; totally different book. ;) This book would spend the majority of it's pages on running, looking for clues, dodging criminals, and other suspense whatnots.

Anyway, so much fun to see the comparison between selling query and back cover blurb.

Thanks for sharing it!

Oh, I meant to say, that we're going to be accepting Query Letters now as part of our PitchFests.

(Or, as I like to think of it, now you can suck at pitches *and* query letters. But seriously, 99% of writers suck at these, and the good news is that sucking is just a starting point on the road to awesome.)

This is an awesome post!

We linked to it over at Pitch University, and I swear it ought receive a Pitch U award. Okay, I totally stopped writing this comment and created a BADGE just for you. I'm awarding you the title of "Totally Amazing Resource." If you go to the our website, you'll find it here:
http://www.pitch-university.com/badges/