Kewana, You have done a nice job on your essay. You do a nice job of introducing your reader to Hirsch, Agee and Evans. Your use of quotes referring to how each author feels towards the camera and its uses is wonderful. When you offered the example of the woman smelling the flower, it might be beneficial to insert a photo of an actual woman smelling the flower. It would allow me as a reader to form an opinion of what I actually feel when looking at this woman. That might help get your point across. When referring to the camera as being "expressive , not manipulative", that is a strong point. Maybe a few modern day examples would help support this statement.
I do like how you used the quote "..the cruel radiance of what is" in the beginning and at the end of your essay. For me it finishes up nicely.

Overall I think you have a nice essay. You do a nice job introducing us to Hirsch. We're introduced to postmemory and its basic meaning. Maybe you could have spent a little more time dicussing postmemory and how Hirsch is overcome by some of these memories. I think you have some nice structure to your essay. The middle is nice in that you touch on the works the Hirsch relates to. You bring up the photo of the little boy. Your description makes me want to see the photo just to see what kind of pain this boy is encountering. You wrap up your essay nicely. If there werent these photos to go along with the stories, would our memories be as vivid. Nicely done.

I understand where you are coming from. I probably should have taken a more passive approach to this essay. Someone unfamiliar with the work might not get a clear idea of Hirsch's postmemory theory. I wrote how I felt after reading her work instead of engaging her concept.

Ha, I guess I do sound a little angry. I just thought she was rehashing photos and the stories relating to these photos for her own monetary gain. Then trying to make herself out to be the one victimized. I compared it to myself publishing exerpts from book about 9/11, then trying to convince the reader that I somehow was a victim. You did bring up some very nice points in your review. Thank you.

Kewana,
I just finished reading you essay and thought you did a nice job. I too was a little thrown off by the title. I think the "that" is what did it. By the end of the essay, Im still struggling to find out what "that' is. The photos? The Holocaust? Hirsch's essay? Maybe all three. All I'm trying to say is I spent a little time looking for what "that" is supposed to be.

I did enjoy your usage of quotes and then how you referenced them. Thats one thing I believe I did not do. This could greatly help a reader unfamiliar with the work to quickly go to and find the referenced material to get a better understanding. When you make reference to , "one writer", and "another writer", I think it would help your reader to if you actually said who those writers are.

I liked your summary, which kind of gave me an overall feeling of how you felt about Hirsch's work. You give the reader a brief look into Hirsch, and how she allows postmemories to alter her own memories. Nice job!