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14 years ago @ http://writinginflow.b... - How Brain Dysfunction ... · 1 reply · +2 points

I think there should be a moratorium on writers using amnesia as a plot device. And all stories that do use it should automatically get labelled as fantasy.

mood

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14 years ago @ http://margoberendsen.... - Three ways maps relate... · 0 replies · +1 points

Very interesting, thanks for those links. Just having a look at the place your writing about on a map is a great idea for stimulating ideas. Cheers.
mood
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14 years ago @ http://lorimlee.blogsp... - Week 3 blogfest - quer... · 1 reply · +1 points

i think you give a pretty good idea of the premise here. The first para is maybe a little busy around the House of Dering stuff. I'm not sure 'confronted' sounds right, unless they're supposed to be seen as the enemy from the outset. Since he questions their motives later in the query I'm assuming that's not the case. Maybe something like: Also interested in the girl are the House of Dering, the city's ruling family. They tell London he is a magus...

I like the sieve stuff and also why he won't go looking (ill dad) and then what changes his mind (missing dad).

'but as the search for answers grows desperate' is a bit vague, something plot specific here to indicate what problems he faces would be more impactful I think.

'Add to that...' reads a little clumsy. I think you could end the paragraph on 'captors' and it would have a bit of punch to it.

Hope that helps.

mood

14 years ago @ http://margoberendsen.... - What\'s your favorite ... · 0 replies · +1 points

This is a great list you've put together. I think To Kill a Mockingbird is a good example of a book that has a multitude of different types of antagonists, perhaps one of the reasons for its enduring charm.

14 years ago @ http://lorimlee.blogsp... - Gearin\' Up to Get an ... · 0 replies · +1 points

I don't think you can get away from the fact boys are interested in different things to girls. You can certainly appeal to both, but there are certain subjects that will appeal to only one, although I'm sure there are ways to make them palatable. Certainly if it's someone involved in an adventure I don't think it matters which sex they are. May well be considered an issue from a marketing standpoint though. I say have boys and girls together and have something for everyone.

mood
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14 years ago @ http://michaeldlockhar... - aside · 0 replies · +1 points

I think that's probably true of artists of all kinds. Still, I imagine blissful happiness must be nice.
mood

14 years ago @ http://margoberendsen.... - Two opinions on love t... · 1 reply · +1 points

Not really. Guys are more about being appreciated for accomplishments, so our hang ups tend to be more material: providing for loved ones, performing impressive feats, competing and winning. Introspection about emotion doesn't feature very prominently. although female authors seem to think it does (or want it to).

14 years ago @ http://margoberendsen.... - Two opinions on love t... · 3 replies · +2 points

The idea of two men fighting over a girl is a common female romantic fantasy. The YA books of recent times have been predominantly aimed at young women. They also have the girl be not the prettiest girl in school (but okay looking, you know, when she makes the effort) and she tends not to encourage the boys they just happen to fall at her feet (so she isn't seen as a slutty type). The idea of being thought special without trying (who me?) is the kind of fantasy insecure young women (and who isn't insecure about their looks these days?) get off on, which is why it's such a common trope.

I'm just guessing though.

mood

14 years ago @ http://margoberendsen.... - We interrupt this stor... · 0 replies · +1 points

Good point. Life doesn't start when the story does. I'll have to check my MS to see if i can use this idea. cheers.

14 years ago @ http://margoberendsen.... - Surprising tools in yo... · 1 reply · +1 points

It's the condensing down part I find hard. The temptation is to feel like you need a really high concept or killer tag line to wow the agent into submission (pardon the pun), whereas I'm beginning to think its more about finding the agent in the right mood on the right day. They happen to be thinking a romanic novel about a vegetarian falling in love with a butcher would be an easy sell right now, and voila, you just happen to have written that exact premise.

Mind you, an easy to grasp concept and a killer tag line probably wouldn't hurt...

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